Sunday, June 28, 2009

blue rain .osi

' truth '

this transparent bubble
holds a river in flux
a sea in its stillness
the buoyancy of clouds

reflecting a moment
crimson,violet,orange
look how the raindrop feels
on colorful petals

the moon shades it silvern
a sun paints it golden
it could even be blue
if you wear toy glasses

and run like an urchin
through the streets of nowhere
as he finds what he wants
shouting blue rain. , blue rain ..

/ original / z.g.

14 comments:

  1. So beautiful! The imagery was incredibly rich. The first stanza was very powerful!

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  2. nice, like one of those odd dreams where you wake up and not quite sure what happened

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  3. The imagery is amazing. The second stanza was grand. I felt like I was pulled in at that moment, hooked on to the poem. Well done!

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  4. I liked your ending, now he can throw those blue glasses (toy) away.
    ..

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  5. Even an urchin can be the master of his destiny for a moment! That might be enough.

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  6. Like that last stanza, Can just about imagine that street urchin shouting blue rain...

    wrath of nature

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  7. Excellent! What a great interpretation of this prompt.

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  8. that was original-------------------!

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  9. Well done, it certainly has moved people. What more do you want from your poetry than that?

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  10. truth is so simple sans umbrellas.

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  11. I like the play in this, the dream like fantasy prompted by the wonderful descriptions.

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  12. very nicely written!
    you are very talented.

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..namastey!~