' fractured hourglass '
face the blues in irises fine
gaze at an infinitude shine
interface with galactic joys
without purpose,reason or rhyme
if only i had time
hitchhiking on nomadic clouds
a way away from 'madding crowds' *
join a shamen or the maci
shadow a lion in his prime
if only i had time
grasp the fun of a grizzly roll
watch a giant panda cajole
and bend a bamboo shoot so green
as laughter becomes life's enzyme
if only i had time
count the stairs at khajuraho
ascend the hills of idaho
in a consciousness of no curbs
echo that one moment sublime
if only i had time
assimilate the words unfurled
in an ordinary people's world
and look for splinters of the heart
in a rubble of dreams and grime
if only i had time ..
/original/z.g.
[khajuraho~temples of india built during 9th-11th century AD -divinity sculpted in intimate postures~symbolizing 'the attainment of the spiritual through the physical'/khajuraho hosts a festival of classical indian dance forms annually * Far from the Madding Crowd (1874)~ Thomas Hardy]
Saturday, January 24, 2009
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What a beautiful, wistful drama! Love the pulse of "If only I had time" beating through the reflections! Wonderful reading expereince! Almost evolves as a song!
That was excellent. Marvellous musings.
I like the way the adventures led straight to the heart. If only I had time.
'in an ordinary people's world' really struck a chord with me. Being ordinary isn't really all that ordinary, is it?
"words unfurled" is so nice, it will stay with me
a way away from maddening crowds <-- love that! As usual deep, thoughtful, lovely.
love the repetive rhythm. Thank you for this journey.
I love traveling, the cheapest way in through poetry ... I so love this style, and the rhyming is smoking! A wonderful read.
I truly like the rhythm of this piece. There is indeed so much wonder to be observed and you have said that clearly. You have some amazing lines in here: laughter becomes life's enzyme---super.
Deborah Godin said...
"OSI If I only had time -
The inclusion of the Hardy and temple references blend into this very well - it has the feel of your own personal mythology!"
January 25, 2009 5:19 PM
Every line was wonderful, but I especially loved these two:
"and look for splinters of the heart
in a rubble of dreams and grime"
Powerful! Thanks for a beautiful read.
i love how you use the line "if only i had time" throughout the poem. all of these things appeal to me.. i like what you've written here.
nomadic clouds are so inviting! :)
I felt like I was having an adventure just reading this. Wonderful!
Sometimes...when each word is a treat it is hard to say which was the sweetest...I loved this poem.
A wistful list composed with well-chosen words. Exquisite.
What a lovely list and clever rhyme.
Wow! Doing all this will take a lot of time. I hope you find a way to 'have the time.'
Zoya, I enjoyed this immensely. One of my ambitions has been to go to the South Pole. I didn't have the time when I was younger, now that I have the time I am too old.
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zoya--
This is a different meter for you, isn't it?
Quite lovely, made me want to sing it!
Thanks ever so much-
lovely inspiration and apt write :)
You've done a great job with this prompt. I really enjoyed reading this work.
Simply fabulous: the poem itself and the apirations related.
..i truly thank everyone of u ..
thr were so many lines i could see... hitchhiking on nomadic clouds..bending bamboo green... from temples in india to the hills of idaho... in a consciousness w/no curbs... yahoo...!!!...
The maddening crowds to the ending..
"assimulate the words unfurled in an ordinary peoples world." What a moving piece!
zoya--
thank you so much for the in-depth comment you made on my post...I've never seen so many words from you...and it felt so good to see more of 'you'! Thanks for the thoughts and insights there.
Thanks again for this poem--really enjoy your work, zoya!
Beautiful poem!
this reads with such a beautiful rhythm, evokes such lovely images
"hitchhiking on nomadic clouds" ... paving the ways for dreams of all that did not have the time
hitchhiking on nomadic clouds
a way away from 'madding crowds' *
beautiful way there.. i like it a lot
Just beautiful. We all feel the cold breeze that is time. It would truly be nice to stop and see all the wonders of this world. Well done my friend.
love-bd
Yes. I still struggle to bury my religiosity and find a way to let the electro-chemical synaptic activity find a way to embrace the spiritual.
Once bitten thrice shy!
I know that I can't MacGyver my way through my cosmology with pure science but I am very nervous and hesitant to get too close to any flickering bushes..never mind the burning variety.
Perhaps that part of me is permanently broken..it would be a shame.
Simply loved each line.
Thank You for sharing.
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