Saturday, September 20, 2008

autumn.osi

'autumn'

swollen pumpkin dreams turn to frost
choreographing the loneliness
bare limbed trees mime abstract dance forms
one shaky leaf enacts the fall

summer leaves a different color
this rusted brown amber of wine
see his sad alcoholic eyes
just the autumn every season..

/original/z.g
:footnote~
{:before assuming the pen name " zoya"// -noun:fem:_ [ internet sources ~ translate "zoya" as-life-alive- "searcher"- or God's gift-] //- i had penned ~ ages back~ [in college] my first ever ' poem? '* in english~between then and the commencement of my blog in feb 2008, i had not written a single poem - none ( in english).~{"do not write poetry if you can help it"is a quote i like to remember.. this sombre (scribbled at 17) 'poem?-'autumn memories'*-posted > here(click)] - could make u laugh!~(incidentally, i'm born to hindu brahmin parents ,with a liberal mind set :.ref :long time ago question by Geraldine[MPP] "like ur first name"- 'zoya'~ (-it holds no religious connotations)- }
{ps:{sep22-12.14am IST}the said poem? 'autumn memories' can be read at:
http://peerpressurized.blogspot.com/2008/02/autumn-memories.html.-thanks.}

26 comments:

  1. Gee, that first line is great...'swollen pumpkin dreams turn to frost' so visual. I like the whole poem. And how interesting about your name.

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  2. I wonder why some words are italicised? Thought-provoking to link the fall of one leaf to the ultimate "fall".

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  3. You really captured the essence of Autumn here. Thank You for sharing.

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  4. How I love that first line and the weighty image of "swollen"! Quite dynamic!

    Beautiful poem!

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  5. Love your first verse, the image of your words have painted the frosted pumpkin in my mind.

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  6. Now that certainly felt like autumn. Excellent.

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  7. I love the first two lines, which I think easily stand alone. Lovely!

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  8. A wonderful evocation of autumn, love the third line about the tree mime. Also enjoyed your personal note and backstory. I, too, wonder about the italics, and what you would do in those places when reading this aloud.

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  9. .."what you would do in those places when reading this aloud'_
    the question answers itself beautifully.(perhaps stylized accents on the undertones of meaning,diction,interpretation)
    [thanks for asking this-julie-deb godin]

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  10. So many good images in this. I agree with the others-love that first line.

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  11. Good in any case, but considering that it was your first poem in your second language at the age of 17... well... Brava! Like many others, I love the pumpkin line...

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  12. I don't care how old this poem is it's wonderful.
    I really just fell in love with this words. "summer leaves a different color this rusted brown amber of wine
    see his sad alcoholic eyes
    just the autumn every season.." Oh just wonderful. I could get drunk on these words. Great job....
    Always liked the name zoya. Both beautiful and mysterious.

    love-Melanie

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  13. feel there is an error raven~melanie.for the ' poem?' "autumn memories"{'scribbled at 17') one has to click the link -posted> "here"[in the footnote above click 'here'].or else the link for the said poem is- this
    {click 'this']
    this poem 'autumn'.osi [swollen...season] has been written now.

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  14. Dreams turning to frost.... I have known such moments. Being captive to change is very different from having the freedom to change direction!

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  15. 'one shaky leaf enacts the fall' wonderful line full of many images.

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  16. Well done Zoya. I particularly liked the first line. G

    www.mypoeticpath.wordpress.com

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  17. I love the line of summer leaves a different color. But that first one really sings.

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  18. Hi Zoya, I can feel for this poor fellow. At first I was merely into the seasonal change but then I saw for this fellow it happens with every cheap bottle.
    Thank you.

    I too wrote very few poems between college and blogging 2008. I am 'brushing up' on a few techniques, quite a few are new to me. :-)
    ..

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  19. Good capture of the season and interesting reading that follows! Great post!

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  20. summer leaves a different color... cool line.

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  21. ..Sincere Thanks To Each One Of U..

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  22. Dear Zoya,
    I loved this poem.
    And I see the brown amber eyes...and the sadness of this autmun. Thank you for this. It impacted me.

    Thank you too for stopping by my post on this prompt.

    I loved you telling a little about your name. Tell us more...

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  23. thank u beth for the kind remarks that very much encourage me.regarding- "tell us more' -have to-because- “There is no greater agony than bearing an untold story inside you” - Maya Angelou_(courtesy writetoday)
    the reason behind withholding details in the personal profile has been a desire for the readers to respond solely to the writing (rather than to other considerations).i do not intend to hide facts.thank u again..

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  24. The fall of Fall.....hmmmm....I shall ponder that.

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..namastey!~