teen aged effervescence jazzed
with the blues of adolescence
anxieties drummed up the heartbeats
soul searchin' thoughts rock n rolled
first romances light or heady
did awaken a melody
me,the mountain's heightened stupor
you,the forest's wilderness song
stars' distant psychedelic blinks
glowed in the night's carbon eons
passionate moons clouds unsteady
did awaken a melody
twilight years' blurred vision's haze
the lil' tit bits of life amaze
shimmering joys glimmering griefs
in every twinkle love's beliefs
i know o-blah-dah o-blah-dee
did awaken a melody../original/z.g.
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Love it -- especially "shimmering joys glimmering griefs in every twinkle love's beliefs" Tasty wordsmithing!
There are several lines that just tickle my tongue! I agree with egretsnest, and I also love "first romances light or heady did awaken a melody".
It reminds me of the quikening rythm of my heart when I first fell in love! Thanks for this!
"passionate moon, clouds unsteady" my favorite line. Interesting take on the prompt, well done!
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I think I loved the mountain's heightened stupor, simply because it represented a brief wry smile in the midst of more serious matters.
An interesting write!
I don't know what o blada, o blodi is but that doesn't spoil my enjoyment of the poem.
"I don't know what o blada, o blodi is"_ U r from the UK Mandy U can't be serious!..
I enjoyed this journey through time and the music you have created here.
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All wonderful lines, my special favourite; the wilderness forest song', a wonderful read.
Each line is music to my ears. So lovely.
I really enjoyed reading your musical life path.
Excellent! Reminds me of when I first fell in love....
zoya, i know o blada,o bladi
did awaken a melody../ suggests the Beatles and the birth of rheir music. Wonderful! :)
the teach :in my right earnest i still think Mandy is joking[Sir Paul McCartney forgive me please!]..
I agree with others - so many wonderful lines in this journey... My favorites I think are: "me,the mountain's heightened stupor/
you,the forest's wilderness song"
Took me a minute to connect to obladi /oblahda, but when I did, it took me into the music.
Ah
o-blah-dee, o-blah-dah
The Beatle's song
Yes I know the tune although I'm not a fan of them
You thought I was joking but no I wasn't - LOL - and you thought that train on mine was from somewhere near Liverpool - well I may have had in mind steam trains that once ran in that neck of the woods but none like that were ever seen in the UK. It looks typically American to me - the photographer, lori bierly (you can follow the link on her byline) is from New York.
Thanks Mandy!
Great job! I love the way you put words together! This poem is beautiful. =)
I really like the links between life stages and the melodies found in nature. This is a very nice poem.
ahhhh.....every lovely memory is attached to a melody...you have evoked some of my favorites tonight...thank you.
The verse
"passionate moons clouds unsteady
did awaken a melody"
does stand out for me.
I so enjoyed this poem. "The lil' tit bits of life amaze", every little bit in the song of life counts. Thanks for this melodic journey!
Oh, so very nice! Returned here for a second read!
i'm now looking forward to reading your posts and this did not dissapoint! ob-lah-dah ob-lah dee indeed, how suitably located in the poem. Cool!
Oh, this is nicely taking me through life's journey with beautiful music along the way.
When it comes to romance, I am a teenager, so the light heady feeling awakening a melody is very sweet. I did like the likening of mountain's heightened stupor (I'll think of it as disbelief) and forest's wilderness song very much.:)
I like the shimmering" line, sounds like a romance forgotten
Hmmm … hard to miss the Beatle’s reference and definitely fun to respond to your ‘melodious memories’ too! Mine's up finally at Sacred Ruminations this afternoon.
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pure delight! made me smile...
A lovely love song. :) The melody of love changes with time . . .
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