Saturday, July 5, 2008

through a window

it all goes black the blues grab me
with their scorpion tails stab me
for light crave in a closed cocoon
you the glow of the sun, the moon
through a window

would the silence eat up a song
the notes of love could they go wrong
the chuckles are back and throbbin'
because you chirp like a robin
through a window

no noxious fume to choke my breath
life finds a way past every death
and through the chill of damp despair
you rejuvenate like fresh air
through a window

../original/z.g.

[ Ed :- L ine 8 - the heart chuckles back to throbbin' ]

19 comments:

  1. An intricate melody giving much space for thought. Nice.

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  2. I enjoyed the music here, too. Wonderful lyrics.

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  3. your words make me want to throw open my windows right now (which are closed due to the air conditioning)...fresh air & bird song are missed by me in deference to my a/c loving brood.

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  4. Marvelous melody throughout this wonderful poem, Zoya!

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  5. zg, thank you for your poetic thoughts this day! And thnak you for commenting at my OSI post! :)

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  6. "would the silence eat up a song..." Wonderful line.

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  7. This should be sung to a blues rhythm! Very nice.

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  8. "life finds a way past every death
    and through the chill of damp despair
    you rejuvenate like fresh air"

    Wow, terrific lines.

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  9. Yes, very much like the Blues.
    Thank You.

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  10. Had me snappin my fingers... a delight!

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  11. I like the repeating line, a good technique and you use it well

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  12. ahhh i love this! the rhythm matches the content so well

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  13. ..Ur Comments r like Road Signs
    in a strange land..Everyone Of U i Thank..

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  14. could be a love poem to a lost love or an ode to the blues, either way, it's a wonderful twist of words and verse, if I would I dare to read it out loud, I might just feel the sorrow infuse in their meaning

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..namastey!~