Saturday, July 12, 2008

myth..

the church and a mosque
temple and synagogue
junior high schoolers
such sand structures form

a day before the storm

indistinguishable
they all look alike
just the day after
common grains of sand

the consonance of life
is waiting to flower
in the sun-filled hour
of a heart's shangri la

no don't call it a myth ../original/z.g.

myth..#2[july 14 mon]

dreams crumble into pain
faith and its' fractions'
lowest common factor

starts a search for joy
faith and its' fractions'
highest common factor

time and space constant
He is far beyond
the algebra of myth../original/z.g.

22 comments:

  1. The grains of sand that make the houses of worship are as alike as the people inside. That's a wonderful image. How we forget our lives are consonant. Thanks for this.

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  2. I love the last stanza, especially 'a hearts shangri la' - oh, to be in such harmony!

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  3. I think it is a myth but myths are what our dreams are made of, so it's a good one.

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  4. The gaments removed, the address of differences changed, we all share common hopes and goals and dreams.
    Lovely thought provoking lines.

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  5. I wish we could always think this way - we are more alike than different. Beautiful poem!

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  6. You have created such beautiful images with your words. As always.

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  7. dreams crumble into pain- what a a great line, and one that expresses the end of a dream so well.

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  8. dream's end - calm's end

    provocative words...nicely done!

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  9. "the algebra of myth" - that's a wonderful word image I won't soon forget!

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  10. faith as highest...and lowest common factors...and the constants of time and space...far beyond is where I want to be...

    nice work...love it.

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  11. These are both lovely and rich in wonderful phrases. I especially like this stanza:

    the consonance of life
    is waiting to flower
    in the sun-filled hour
    of a heart's shangri la

    and "the algebra of myth." Nicely done.

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  12. Your first poem speaks wonderfully to how we are all alike on a fundamental level. Thank you.

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  13. a day before the storm_
    (re-sequenced in the hope of a
    better sound)/line 1>line5-

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  14. these two are eye openers.. castles made of sand fall into the sea eventually.. sorry couldn't help thinkin bout jimi hendrix... it is a beautiful poem of a heart's shangri la...faith as a mustard seed im told

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  15. I especially love the juxtaposition of images in the first stanza: temple and synagogue with junior high schoolers and sand structures. Lovely stuff! :)

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  16. Really enjoyed this, particuly the first stanza.

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  17. I like how you have the "storm" be the equalizer!

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  18. I enjoyed reading this; I really like that final stanza.

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  19. ..Ur comments educate me..Many Thanks..

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..namastey!~