Saturday, December 13, 2008

distractions. (osi)

' vegas '

chance is a hotel blind
an armchair of habit
senses mortgaged to hope
a creditcard of words

dine on a course of fears
do smoke a pipe of whims
but time's cost is rising
to be paid for with life

vegas undistracted
obfuscates semantics
this dialect so dicy
just lies undeciphered ..


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10 comments:

  1. SandyCarlsonDecember 14, 2008 at 8:26 AM

    Whoa! That was an adventure. I love the plays on words and the imagery. Your definition of chance as "senses mortgaged to hope" is marvelous.

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  2. anthonynorthDecember 14, 2008 at 10:36 AM

    An excellent poem, powerful yet so subtle.

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  3. RavenDecember 14, 2008 at 2:03 PM

    Much food for thought. I like the line Sandy Carlson picked out... "senses mortgaged to hope."

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  4. gautami tripathyDecember 15, 2008 at 8:27 AM

    Very original way of being distracted. Loved it truly!

    mundane meanderings

    PS: Please do come and post at Monday Poetry Train Revisited. You will love to board it

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  5. Tumblewords:December 15, 2008 at 11:18 AM

    Great job - distraction comes in so many shapes - it's all in the dealer's hand...:)

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  6. DeLiDecember 15, 2008 at 9:03 PM

    i like how you described chance

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  7. spacedlawDecember 16, 2008 at 10:31 AM

    I like the atmosphere in the first stanza.

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  8. Tammy BrierlyDecember 16, 2008 at 7:29 PM

    Wow! I loved the word play. Excellent!

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  9. zoya gautamDecember 22, 2008 at 11:32 AM

    ..Many Thanks To All Of U..

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  10. zoya gautamDecember 22, 2008 at 11:37 AM

    Deborah Godin said...

    "I particularly enjoyed your poems for OSI "Distractions", especially the longer one - humor and words games mixed with keen observation!"

    December 14, 2008 6:19 PM

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..namastey!~

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