Sunday, October 4, 2009

descent.osi

seesaw

clad in a white haze of transience
watch the glorious niagara
falling simply to rise again
water descends but clouds ascend

fragrant agonies burn inside
the petals shrouded in the mist
a tear from heaven is the dew
water descends but clouds ascend

what pearls of sorrow in those eyes
to reach them i just want to sink
like a river into the sea
water descends but clouds ascend ..

/ original / z.g.
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  1. Beth P.October 5, 2009 at 6:58 AM

    dear zoya--

    this is one of your more poignant poems of late. Really enjoyed the meter or pentameter, more correctly?

    yes, descent and ascent are yin and yang

    thank you, zoya~

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  2. Quiet PathsOctober 5, 2009 at 9:24 AM

    zoya, the rhythms are beautiful and the emotional content I think I understand well.

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  3. Sandra.ifOctober 5, 2009 at 9:53 AM

    I can see that ......thank you!

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  4. Tumblewords:October 5, 2009 at 2:04 PM

    Purely perfect! I love the repeat lines and the gentleness of the ups and downs. Perfect!

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  5. indicaspeciesOctober 5, 2009 at 3:58 PM

    a tear from heaven is the dew...that's lovely! Thank you for sharing.

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  6. zoya gautamOctober 6, 2009 at 1:33 AM

    .. many thanks ..

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  7. SandyCarlsonOctober 6, 2009 at 2:28 AM

    I like the continuous movement of your clouds. Very nice. The ascent gives me hope.

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  8. Tammie LeeOctober 6, 2009 at 7:14 AM

    lovely the rhythm of circles you tell in your tale. Beautifully melodic.

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  9. Maurice LauherOctober 6, 2009 at 8:50 AM

    zoya, verry nice - i like the repeating line for clouds do ascend

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  10. PattiOctober 7, 2009 at 5:19 PM

    Beautiful repetition! The last stanza totally got to me- I sure can relate~

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  11. The Write GirlOctober 8, 2009 at 8:27 PM

    You have wonderful talent...Your rhythm and poetic construction is refreshing. I will have to visit you again.

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  12. sgreerpittOctober 11, 2009 at 11:02 AM

    the cycle of life - water descends, clouds ascend; powerful lines.

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..namastey!~

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