Saturday, September 6, 2008

'defenses down'


the soft drizzles of hope
no thwarting umbrellas
sunshine,a clear truth
need no colored glasses
chuck the wind cheater off
the spirit rides the breeze
roll n roll on the snow
earth's creamy playground
defenses down greet
the wind, rain and snow
and a beaming sun
see,the children can
while the grown-ups dream *..

*[revised:our dream is their world-
/sun07.'08]
/original/z.g.

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19 comments:

  1. spacedlawSeptember 7, 2008 at 4:21 AM

    For a dare, we could do this: too many defenses might forbid us to enjoy the world - good or bad.

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  2. SandyCarlsonSeptember 7, 2008 at 4:22 AM

    To be like the children and play as you describe would be to live in a beautiful world.

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  3. AnonymousSeptember 7, 2008 at 6:35 AM

    A good poem. It reminds of the thought that we get what we look for.

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  4. sgreerpittSeptember 7, 2008 at 8:17 AM

    It seems trite to just say I like this, but I do. Your poem evokes for me the broader array of defenses we hang onto against life, nature, letting go...

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  5. anthonynorthSeptember 7, 2008 at 9:04 AM

    We all need to let go of our inhibitions from time to time.
    You say it perfectly.

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  6. AnonymousSeptember 7, 2008 at 9:16 AM

    Nice work - particularly the first two lines!

    Lirone

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  7. RavenSeptember 7, 2008 at 11:45 AM

    Wonderful description of the inner child in all of us (well in me anyway), who longs be unself-conscious again, who longs to let go and just "be."

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  8. Kathie BrownSeptember 7, 2008 at 12:41 PM

    Can I let my spirit ride the breeze? Sounds like fun, whether it is our inner child, our children, or ourselves.

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  9. Quiet PathsSeptember 7, 2008 at 5:01 PM

    This is such a "take the world as it comes", carefree, ride the wind theme. I love its spirit. Those first lines were great and pulled me in.

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  10. susanSeptember 7, 2008 at 9:21 PM

    Easy to fall in and dream. Thanks for the read.

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  11. JulieSeptember 8, 2008 at 1:03 AM

    A wonderful celebration of the physical.

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  12. me ann my cameraSeptember 8, 2008 at 2:56 AM

    Welcome daily the world of nature and embrace it as if you were one with it. Make snow angels and walk barefooted in the sand. Lovely words and message within your lines.

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  13. JimSeptember 8, 2008 at 7:48 PM

    I almost can remember when ...
    When I was like this, young and uninhibited at play.
    Also reminds me of 'some' in the Hippie days.
    ..

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  14. Tumblewords:September 8, 2008 at 8:14 PM

    Full of spirit - seems like only when the defenses are down can one meet life in a fully engaged manner. Nice work!

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  15. TDSeptember 8, 2008 at 8:47 PM

    Drizzle as cleansing hope. The umbrella as a hope inhibitor. I enjoyed the imagery. Good poem.

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  16. Patois42September 9, 2008 at 7:28 AM

    An ideal match for the prompt. The freedom we have as kids to simply be. Ah!

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  17. little wing writerSeptember 9, 2008 at 4:50 PM

    to be as children.. thank you, that our sometimes weary spirits would remember the wonders of childhood.. thank you

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  18. AnonymousSeptember 10, 2008 at 2:51 PM

    You said this so beautifully!

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  19. zoya gautamSeptember 12, 2008 at 11:09 AM

    ..sincere thanks to Every One of U..

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..namastey!~

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