Sunday, June 1, 2008

freedom to the rain

tear - -

a question ,
a statement ?
or both ,
in your eyes
the verb
becomes a noun ,
on my lips
a lifeless word ,
in your eyes
a pearl alive ,
a ray of light
flashes through it
and disperses ,
into all the colors
of the rainbow ,
drops to the earth
a tear ,
i search for it
in the rain ..

original/z.g./

[ Edited - / dec 12 .2009.sat ]
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  1. SandyCarlsonJune 1, 2008 at 5:14 AM

    I love the line, "In your eyes, a verb becomes a noun." This is a wonderful poem on the relationship between language and emotion--and relationship! Thanks.
    Writing in Faith: Poems

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  2. BarbJune 1, 2008 at 8:25 AM

    'on my lips a lifeless word' is so true! Until it reaches the ear of the listener or the eye of the reader it really is lifeless. Thank you, I really enjoyed this.

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  3. JP/debJune 1, 2008 at 8:53 AM

    Wonderful tight poem! I agree with Sandy - love in your eyes
    the verb becomes a noun!

    Peace,
    JanePoet

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  4. PamJune 1, 2008 at 11:16 AM

    I really like the unusual use of punctuation in this poem. Also a nice use of the two "tears".

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  5. maryt/theteachJune 1, 2008 at 12:09 PM

    "a tear/absorbed with love/returned as rain" how beautiful, zoya! Thank you very much! :D

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  6. RavenJune 1, 2008 at 1:49 PM

    "absorbed with love/returned as rain" - wonderful line, along with others mentioned. That one is my favorite. One of my favorite little pieces of life trivia is that the chemical make-up of tears we cry from emotion is different than the chemical make-up of tears we cry peeling onions. I think that's just incredible. Good poem.

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  7. RoswilaJune 1, 2008 at 2:23 PM

    "a question,
    a statement?
    or both!
    in your eyes
    the verb
    becomes a noun!
    on my lips
    a lifeless word
    in your eyes
    a pearl alive!"

    Really nice and intriguing imagery to ponder in the lines above.

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  8. Pirate PrincessJune 1, 2008 at 2:35 PM

    So much to like about this poem - you've put together a great piece!

    I think these lines are my fave -

    "on my lips
    a lifeless word
    in your eyes
    a pearl alive!"

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  9. LA NickersJune 1, 2008 at 3:30 PM

    Very nice. And Sandy said it so well. That was my favorite line too!

    ;-)

    Blessings,
    Linda

    DRESS BLUES, at Nickers and Ink

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  10. Ms AfropolitanJune 1, 2008 at 5:32 PM

    ahh..this is so beautiful; the imagery, the language and the message...you have a talent for 'floetry' - the way a poem flows.

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  11. Rae TriggJune 1, 2008 at 6:45 PM

    Beautiful poem. I especially like the line "on my lips/a lifeless word/in your eyes/a pearl alive!" A wonderful illustration of a loving relationship.

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  12. JoyceJune 1, 2008 at 11:08 PM

    It sounds like you love the person who is crying, and that they feel better after the cry. :)

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  13. AnonymousJune 2, 2008 at 8:48 AM

    What a gorgeous poem of love!!

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  14. Quiet PathsJune 2, 2008 at 9:17 AM

    you have woven a tapestry of beautiful words...

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  15. me ann my cameraJune 2, 2008 at 2:03 PM

    'a verb becomes a noun'...is seems as if the verb has become transformed upon finding a place of being.

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  16. little wing writerJune 3, 2008 at 5:44 PM

    yeah, what they all said!!!

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  17. WHJune 4, 2008 at 12:22 PM

    I'm with Sandy--"In your eyes, the noun becomes a verb." This is splendid, zg.

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  18. zoya gautamJune 7, 2008 at 7:29 PM

    ..with gratitude i express my Thankfulness for All Ur Comments which are so Helpful..

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  19. Geraldine June 9, 2008 at 8:55 AM

    This was wonderful Zoya. Unique and with a nice rhythm too.

    www.mypoeticpath.wordpress.com

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  20. storytellerJune 12, 2008 at 2:16 PM

    Simply engaging piece … I enjoy the cadences and juxtapositions! Thank you ;--)
    Hugs and blessings,

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..namastey!~

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