Saturday, June 21, 2008

melody

teen aged effervescence jazzed
with the blues of adolescence
anxieties drummed up the heartbeats
soul searchin' thoughts rock n rolled

first romances light or heady
did awaken a melody

me,the mountain's heightened stupor
you,the forest's wilderness song
stars' distant psychedelic blinks
glowed in the night's carbon eons

passionate moons clouds unsteady
did awaken a melody

twilight years' blurred vision's haze
the lil' tit bits of life amaze
shimmering joys glimmering griefs
in every twinkle love's beliefs

i know o-blah-dah o-blah-dee
did awaken a melody../original/z.g.
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  1. AnonymousJune 21, 2008 at 11:04 PM

    Love it -- especially "shimmering joys glimmering griefs in every twinkle love's beliefs" Tasty wordsmithing!

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  2. BarbJune 21, 2008 at 11:31 PM

    There are several lines that just tickle my tongue! I agree with egretsnest, and I also love "first romances light or heady did awaken a melody".

    It reminds me of the quikening rythm of my heart when I first fell in love! Thanks for this!

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  3. Geraldine June 22, 2008 at 1:28 AM

    "passionate moon, clouds unsteady" my favorite line. Interesting take on the prompt, well done!

    www.mypoeticpath.wordpress.com

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  4. Gemma WisemanJune 22, 2008 at 1:32 AM

    I think I loved the mountain's heightened stupor, simply because it represented a brief wry smile in the midst of more serious matters.

    An interesting write!

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  5. MandyJune 22, 2008 at 3:41 AM

    I don't know what o blada, o blodi is but that doesn't spoil my enjoyment of the poem.

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  6. zoya gautamJune 22, 2008 at 4:15 AM

    "I don't know what o blada, o blodi is"_ U r from the UK Mandy U can't be serious!..

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  7. SandyCarlsonJune 22, 2008 at 5:10 AM

    I enjoyed this journey through time and the music you have created here.
    Writing in Faith: Poems

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  8. me ann my cameraJune 22, 2008 at 5:22 AM

    All wonderful lines, my special favourite; the wilderness forest song', a wonderful read.

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  9. TeriJune 22, 2008 at 5:36 AM

    Each line is music to my ears. So lovely.

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  10. AnonymousJune 22, 2008 at 7:09 AM

    I really enjoyed reading your musical life path.

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  11. AnonymousJune 22, 2008 at 8:49 AM

    Excellent! Reminds me of when I first fell in love....

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  12. maryt/theteachJune 22, 2008 at 8:51 AM

    zoya, i know o blada,o bladi
    did awaken a melody../ suggests the Beatles and the birth of rheir music. Wonderful! :)

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  13. zoya gautamJune 22, 2008 at 9:10 AM

    the teach :in my right earnest i still think Mandy is joking[Sir Paul McCartney forgive me please!]..

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  14. RavenJune 22, 2008 at 9:42 AM

    I agree with others - so many wonderful lines in this journey... My favorites I think are: "me,the mountain's heightened stupor/
    you,the forest's wilderness song"

    Took me a minute to connect to obladi /oblahda, but when I did, it took me into the music.

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  15. MandyJune 22, 2008 at 11:34 AM

    Ah
    o-blah-dee, o-blah-dah
    The Beatle's song
    Yes I know the tune although I'm not a fan of them

    You thought I was joking but no I wasn't - LOL - and you thought that train on mine was from somewhere near Liverpool - well I may have had in mind steam trains that once ran in that neck of the woods but none like that were ever seen in the UK. It looks typically American to me - the photographer, lori bierly (you can follow the link on her byline) is from New York.

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  16. zoya gautamJune 22, 2008 at 12:53 PM

    Thanks Mandy!

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  17. AnonymousJune 22, 2008 at 1:20 PM

    Great job! I love the way you put words together! This poem is beautiful. =)

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  18. PamJune 22, 2008 at 1:47 PM

    I really like the links between life stages and the melodies found in nature. This is a very nice poem.

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  19. RICJune 22, 2008 at 9:28 PM

    ahhhh.....every lovely memory is attached to a melody...you have evoked some of my favorites tonight...thank you.

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  20. spacedlawJune 23, 2008 at 12:16 AM

    The verse
    "passionate moons clouds unsteady
    did awaken a melody"
    does stand out for me.

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  21. MyBellaviaJune 23, 2008 at 7:49 AM

    I so enjoyed this poem. "The lil' tit bits of life amaze", every little bit in the song of life counts. Thanks for this melodic journey!

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  22. Tumblewords:June 23, 2008 at 8:34 AM

    Oh, so very nice! Returned here for a second read!

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  23. Ms AfropolitanJune 23, 2008 at 10:22 AM

    i'm now looking forward to reading your posts and this did not dissapoint! ob-lah-dah ob-lah dee indeed, how suitably located in the poem. Cool!

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  24. indicaspeciesJune 24, 2008 at 2:49 AM

    Oh, this is nicely taking me through life's journey with beautiful music along the way.

    When it comes to romance, I am a teenager, so the light heady feeling awakening a melody is very sweet. I did like the likening of mountain's heightened stupor (I'll think of it as disbelief) and forest's wilderness song very much.:)

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  25. lissaJune 24, 2008 at 6:26 PM

    I like the shimmering" line, sounds like a romance forgotten

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  26. storytellerJune 27, 2008 at 2:50 PM

    Hmmm … hard to miss the Beatle’s reference and definitely fun to respond to your ‘melodious memories’ too! Mine's up finally at Sacred Ruminations this afternoon.
    Hugs and blessings,

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  27. Pirate PrincessJune 28, 2008 at 9:20 AM

    pure delight! made me smile...

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  28. JoyceJune 28, 2008 at 1:43 PM

    A lovely love song. :) The melody of love changes with time . . .

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  29. zoya gautamJune 28, 2008 at 9:45 PM

    ..Always grateful for Ur
    insightful comments..Thank Every One Of U ..

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..namastey!~

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