Sunday, August 9, 2009

ocean.osi


yo también espero ( i also hope )


ocean to ocean
palindromical tides
on this shore of nescience
i crush my tibia fibula
build the keel and the hull
with a drop of my blood
draw one heart
on this paper-boat
sailing into the unknown
only to sink and drown
become the ocean
for that moment of trance
when you hear me in the wave ..

/ original / z.g.

[ Ed : Line 2 - the meaning too , a palindrome ]
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18 comments:

  1. Sherri B.August 9, 2009 at 9:49 AM

    When you hear me in the wave...what a powerful ending that brings you full circle from the first line. Beautiful and visual!

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  2. Tammie LeeAugust 9, 2009 at 12:42 PM

    'become the ocean' wonderful perception~
    followed by 'when you hear me in that wave' wonderful again.
    very creative piece.

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  3. MaggieAugust 9, 2009 at 2:57 PM

    How wonderful to be...ocean to ocean and leave our drop of blood into the ocean.

    I could hear the (wave) in your ocean poem...tender and strong.

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  4. sgreerpittAugust 9, 2009 at 4:53 PM

    first of all, thank you so much for the wonderful new word -- nescience. What a useful word for a college professor to have! Knowing the word now, I really love that phrase "shore of nescience." Very powerful, evoking such strong emotion that one would crush one's bones to build a boat.

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  5. AnonymousAugust 9, 2009 at 9:30 PM

    wonderful written..

    ah..the mesmerising waves..

    shraddha

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  6. JeevesAugust 9, 2009 at 9:49 PM

    Moment of trance....this poem has me in trance

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  7. lissaAugust 10, 2009 at 9:50 AM

    I have to admit, I had to look up a few words but I really like the last few lines, I imagine someone lost but still has hope of being found

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  8. Bobbie SandlinAugust 10, 2009 at 6:59 PM

    Gorgeous writing!!

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  9. Tumblewords:August 10, 2009 at 7:50 PM

    Beautifully written. The full circle of tides and sea...

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  10. JimAugust 11, 2009 at 2:56 AM

    Next time I go to the beach I will think of you bobbing along side me! I love your little boat that becomes integrated. And the opposing and equal waves, what a thought!
    Thanks,
    ..

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  11. gautami tripathyAugust 11, 2009 at 5:51 AM

    Good one!

    ravens chase out thoughts from the mind

    Kill Word Verification

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  12. AnonymousAugust 12, 2009 at 9:10 PM

    i showed it to my orthopedician friend..he laughed and laughed at the mention of tibia fibula..

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  13. gabrielleAugust 12, 2009 at 9:46 PM

    this is exquisite. Yo tambien espero.

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  14. zoya gautamAugust 13, 2009 at 2:04 PM

    .. many thanks everyone ..

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  15. AnonymousAugust 13, 2009 at 5:20 PM

    i like the thought of being part of an ocean...

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  16. JoneAugust 14, 2009 at 6:29 PM

    The imagery is amazing "palindromical" what and "nescience"...what great words.

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  17. SandyCarlsonAugust 14, 2009 at 7:17 PM

    Oh, to be heard!

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  18. Gemma WisemanAugust 15, 2009 at 5:39 AM

    Those unusual key words ~ palindromical" and "nescience" magnetise with their sound, just like that trance-like feeling of becoming one with the ocean ~ drifting rhythms! The sounds and the images are quite hypnotic!

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..namastey!~

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