Sunday, March 29, 2009

smoke. osi

' fumes '

an arson without fire
minus matchstick or flame
keeps her heart smoldering
as the eyes gather smoke

rings,not always golden #

adrift the rings of grey
are lies being puffed out
of burning cigarettes
forming vicious circles

fumes, in many ways, fog *

cloud on a hill far off
the magic of distance
enhancing the beauty
but one knows volcanoes

have a mind of their own ..

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[past cmnt 10 /# *addendum-rings,not always golden/fumes, in many ways,fog]
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  1. anthonynorthMarch 29, 2009 at 3:57 AM

    Many excellent warnings of smoke there. Enjoyed them.

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  2. MaggieMarch 29, 2009 at 4:13 AM

    I enjoyed all three especially the smoking eyes.

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  3. PamMarch 29, 2009 at 6:00 AM

    Wow! to get into the mind of a waiting arsonist-- wonderful. I love the "smoking eyes".

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  4. BarbMarch 29, 2009 at 6:18 AM

    Oh, this is lovely. I especially love 'keeps her heart smoldering as the eyes gather smoke'.

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  5. zoya gautamMarch 29, 2009 at 8:08 AM

    Deborah Godin said...

    " ..OSI smoke - "an arson without fire" What an unforgettable image of the heart! .. "

    March 29, 2009 7:49 AM

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  6. Beth P.March 29, 2009 at 8:19 AM

    zoya--
    this was magnificent, as always--
    and I love your analogy with volcanos, who do, indeed, have a mind of their own--

    thank you

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  7. sgreerpittMarch 29, 2009 at 9:36 AM

    I really like the image of the arsonist sans matches and fire -- suggesting that arson is a state of mind, burning through the world. But I especially liked the lines:
    "but one knows volcanoes/have a mind of their own .."
    For indeed they do.

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  8. SandyCarlsonMarch 29, 2009 at 2:44 PM

    They most definitely do, and it seems to lie close to the belly of the earth!

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  9. Quiet PathsMarch 29, 2009 at 4:05 PM

    This reads to me almost like a trilogy; separate themes bound by the fire image. I want to know more about the stories... intriguing and visual.

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  10. Tumblewords:March 29, 2009 at 7:29 PM

    Lovely clouds of smoke! Amazing how many ways you've explored that very elusive 'stuff'. Nice work!

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  11. Amias (ljm and liquidplastic)March 30, 2009 at 12:59 PM

    I especially like the last one, as volcanoes mesmerizes me.

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  12. RavenMarch 30, 2009 at 1:03 PM

    Lots of lovely lines here. I especially like the "volcanoes have a mind of their own" particuarly juxtaposed with the inner smoldering of the first stanza. Lovely.

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  13. zoya gautamApril 1, 2009 at 1:50 AM

    ..thanking everyone..

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  14. bluetoqueApril 1, 2009 at 9:28 PM

    Nice. I really love the way you close it out.

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  15. AnonymousApril 1, 2009 at 11:22 PM

    magic....

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  16. Sherri B.April 2, 2009 at 12:08 PM

    Thanks for commenting on my poem. Regarding my name, people know me by this name so I'm hesitant to change it. And I do feel I am still learning about poetry as I go along...and I identify with it strongly because I was such a fledgling when I first started. But thank you for the implied compliment -- I appreciate it!

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  17. JimApril 2, 2009 at 7:12 PM

    rings,not always golden
    fumes, in many ways, fog
    have a mind of their own ..

    Zoya was this intentional, or did I find it?
    I liked these, best probably the volcano with its own mind because I have been inside the Mt. St. Helen crater. It was smoldering, waiting..
    ..

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  18. AnonymousApril 5, 2009 at 12:36 AM

    very moving and a different thought :)

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  19. UnknownJune 29, 2012 at 11:44 AM

    Are you talking about me? ... my name is osi, and i smoke... on youtube, username: osismokes

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..namastey!~

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