tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-319385256731961761.post333076402465207336..comments2023-07-01T02:25:10.760-07:00Comments on somewhere beyond: ”COLOR”zoya gautamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/18260853657724890897noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-319385256731961761.post-33235337136917476282008-05-04T07:23:00.000-07:002008-05-04T07:23:00.000-07:00I've just read your last few OSI pieces and find m...I've just read your last few OSI pieces and find myself thinking of ee cummings like Mary. Each piece conveys emotional energy with vivid images ... and it's clear that you tap into 'your right brain' with your fingers provide words for what you see and sense! Marvelous!!!<BR/>Hugs and blessings,storytellerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14101550406171982090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-319385256731961761.post-65377908771453889572008-04-24T06:41:00.000-07:002008-04-24T06:41:00.000-07:00like all your assonance of i thru here. it's got a...like all your assonance of i thru here. it's got a bright quick movement to it.Pearlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05251168248457758117noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-319385256731961761.post-46314354687678602242008-04-23T15:50:00.000-07:002008-04-23T15:50:00.000-07:00You've certainly wrapped up a taut little poem her...You've certainly wrapped up a taut little poem here. It's all good and I like the way you've used rhyme. 'In the "right" side of my mind/the broken half of the moon/of a myriad stupid desires' - beautiful and sad.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-319385256731961761.post-10971530910172810522008-04-21T09:01:00.000-07:002008-04-21T09:01:00.000-07:00Interesting thought - the mood stays wrapped in au...Interesting thought - the mood stays wrapped in autumn, Nicely done!<BR/> I deleted the previous comment to hide a typo! :)Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-319385256731961761.post-10689417285342297392008-04-21T08:58:00.000-07:002008-04-21T08:58:00.000-07:00This comment has been removed by the author.Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-319385256731961761.post-60342799172561228412008-04-21T03:28:00.000-07:002008-04-21T03:28:00.000-07:00the teach >i value ur criticism ma'm.thanks for th...the teach >i value ur criticism ma'm.thanks for the help..Raven>thank U! ur opinion counts..SandyCarlson >u make the learning process easy.thank U!<BR/>teri c>the pov of an artist!thank U!...Quiet Paths>musicians hear differently!thank U!...piacere,all of U!zoya gautamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18260853657724890897noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-319385256731961761.post-79404702118376285992008-04-20T19:48:00.000-07:002008-04-20T19:48:00.000-07:00whoa...desolate quiet circumstance. That is a zin...whoa...desolate quiet circumstance. That is a zinger. You have some great images.Quiet Pathshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00758542150832581706noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-319385256731961761.post-85459612677231594142008-04-20T18:53:00.000-07:002008-04-20T18:53:00.000-07:00I just love this one! You have produced such wond...I just love this one! You have produced such wonderful images.Terihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16029722057577018059noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-319385256731961761.post-59001473824510143572008-04-20T17:01:00.000-07:002008-04-20T17:01:00.000-07:00I'm with Mary in my appreciation of "to keep my ki...I'm with Mary in my appreciation of "to keep my kindergaten whims alive"--especially in contrast to the psychological tensions of the autumn frame of mind.<BR/><A HREF="http://slcpoems.blogspot.com" REL="nofollow">Writing in Faith: Poems</A>SandyCarlsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10752798823532580733noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-319385256731961761.post-70380037323197201082008-04-20T16:34:00.000-07:002008-04-20T16:34:00.000-07:00"my mood stays trapped..." very nice... I know th..."my mood stays trapped..." very nice... I know the feeling well. I agree with the teach about "outside."<BR/><BR/>Good poem.Ravenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04996538460071167819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-319385256731961761.post-4793014010125811092008-04-20T15:11:00.000-07:002008-04-20T15:11:00.000-07:00Zoya, have you ever read e.e. cummings? I get the ...Zoya, have you ever read e.e. cummings? I get the feeling of that poet"s work from yours. I love "to keep my kindergarten whims<BR/>alive! to the colors of spring outside!" <BR/><BR/>My suggestion is to delete the word "outside." Where else could spring be but outside. Hope you don't mind my criticism... :Dmaryt/theteachhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17516961981692076719noreply@blogger.com